Phantom

October 13, 2013 by Charron's Chatter 17 Comments

Karen Robiscoe dba CHARRONs CHATTER

 

 

 

 

 

 

What part of human hurts?

Is it light, or liquid,

or spaces in between?

Where rainbows break?

& swallows ache

take wing away

unseen
 
 
Which hue of spectrum endures?

The black, or blue,

or all-eclipsing white?

Where contrasts merge

& merging—-verge

on regimenting

light
 
 
When does fire die?

In eyes, or skies,

or pitted depths infernal?

Where demons gloat

but hope yet floats

and floating—

is eternal

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I bring to you an arrow, whole, Use it, or break it, But if you choose to take it --Know-- With it also, I will go. © Karen Robiscoe @1992
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17 Responses to “Phantom”

  1. cindy knoke October 13, 2013 at 3:36 am

    so lovely~

  2. Al October 13, 2013 at 10:11 am

    Excellent

    • Charron's Chatter October 13, 2013 at 1:42 pm

      Hi Alastair! How is you…this was going to be a villanelle–but I got entranced with the rhyme scheme (ish) that existed already when I opened this “note”.

      I am all dramatic girl today, and want to write a villanelle…:)

    • Al October 13, 2013 at 2:04 pm

      I had to look up what a villanelle was 🙂 I am learning a lot about different styles of poetry. I found out a couple of months ago .. okay, it could have been a year, my dad has been writing poetry for a few years

    • Charron's Chatter October 13, 2013 at 2:12 pm

      DOH! I love how honest you are–me too–because why bother elsewise. I just learned about them, well 8 or 9 years ago, but have only started writing them this past year in the blog-O-sphere. What’s fun about it, is, you tie your hands, and then try to make macrame outta the knots!!

      I aspire to one day write a truly Dylanesque villanelle–he was the: Do not go gently into that good night–fellow.

      The trick to them–that I have only implemented with any success once–is to choose very malleable 1st and 3rd lines to opening stanzas–since these are the repeaters–and further, to move the subsequent tercets forward as a poetic entity tied with the rest–not as stand alone stanzas, something that’s easy to fall into when wrestling with the knots of a villanelle.

      you should so try one!!

    • Al October 13, 2013 at 2:22 pm

      I will see what I can do at some point. Thank you for the info on them, I appreciate it

    • Charron's Chatter October 13, 2013 at 2:26 pm

      it all comes when it do. That’s the beauty and flexibility of art. 🙂

    • Al October 13, 2013 at 2:28 pm

      🙂

  3. Philip Edwards October 14, 2013 at 11:26 am

    Hi Karen,

    Words—Wow! Touched here…Heart-speak and
    mind-reach and…Creative Spirit—You! Thanks
    for sharing this with us…Phil E.

  4. Books & Art - Spirit & Soul - Lesley Fletcher October 14, 2013 at 10:34 pm

    All of it Karen – all of it.

  5. Debaroon October 15, 2013 at 12:07 pm

    Goshhhhhhhhhhh!!!…This I so heartfelt a piece….I’m stunned at its words, struck by its brilliance….

    • Charron's Chatter October 15, 2013 at 2:26 pm

      I am humbled to read that. (and gladdened) What I like about this–and it evolved really naturally–is the end lines of each stanza creating a “hidden” message. I bolded it initially, but it didn’t look right, so I opted for italics.

      I opened this old note wanting to write a villanelle–so I was looking for sweeping lines–but this poem practically demanded this structure. No ifs, ands, or villanelles about it! You know how that goes!

  6. apeerless July 15, 2014 at 2:51 pm

    ❤ I love writings that make me go hmm ~Thank you~