What part of human hurts?
Is it light, or liquid,
or spaces in between?
Where rainbows break?
& swallows ache
take wing away
unseen
Which hue of spectrum endures?
The black, or blue,
or all-eclipsing white?
Where contrasts merge
& merging—-verge
on regimenting
light
When does fire die?
In eyes, or skies,
or pitted depths infernal?
Where demons gloat
but hope yet floats
and floating—
is eternal
so lovely~
just a little sigh of a poem, really…:) Ty, Cindy. 🙂
Excellent
Hi Alastair! How is you…this was going to be a villanelle–but I got entranced with the rhyme scheme (ish) that existed already when I opened this “note”.
I am all dramatic girl today, and want to write a villanelle…:)
I had to look up what a villanelle was 🙂 I am learning a lot about different styles of poetry. I found out a couple of months ago .. okay, it could have been a year, my dad has been writing poetry for a few years
DOH! I love how honest you are–me too–because why bother elsewise. I just learned about them, well 8 or 9 years ago, but have only started writing them this past year in the blog-O-sphere. What’s fun about it, is, you tie your hands, and then try to make macrame outta the knots!!
I aspire to one day write a truly Dylanesque villanelle–he was the: Do not go gently into that good night–fellow.
The trick to them–that I have only implemented with any success once–is to choose very malleable 1st and 3rd lines to opening stanzas–since these are the repeaters–and further, to move the subsequent tercets forward as a poetic entity tied with the rest–not as stand alone stanzas, something that’s easy to fall into when wrestling with the knots of a villanelle.
you should so try one!!
I will see what I can do at some point. Thank you for the info on them, I appreciate it
it all comes when it do. That’s the beauty and flexibility of art. 🙂
🙂
Hi Karen,
Words—Wow! Touched here…Heart-speak and
mind-reach and…Creative Spirit—You! Thanks
for sharing this with us…Phil E.
o Philip. Thank you for commenting. Your comments mean the world! (and not this one…;) Have the best week. 🙂
All of it Karen – all of it.
you love? 🙂
I loved…
it speaks of the Love…and the unmet a little, too
Thank you for saying, Les. You are awesome.
I do. 😉
Goshhhhhhhhhhh!!!…This I so heartfelt a piece….I’m stunned at its words, struck by its brilliance….
I am humbled to read that. (and gladdened) What I like about this–and it evolved really naturally–is the end lines of each stanza creating a “hidden” message. I bolded it initially, but it didn’t look right, so I opted for italics.
I opened this old note wanting to write a villanelle–so I was looking for sweeping lines–but this poem practically demanded this structure. No ifs, ands, or villanelles about it! You know how that goes!
❤ I love writings that make me go hmm ~Thank you~